Today I was learning about linking my first sentence to the last.
I enjoyed writing this story because it was about a time i was very afraid.
I found it challenging to come up with a first sentence to link to the bottom because sometimes the sentence doesn't sound right.
My digital learning object shows that i can write a story about a time i was terrified of something like the water.
Next time I would change my writing to have more similies or even add some metaphores because it doesn't sound much exciting.
Endless Deep
When you’re just a young person, the pool feels a thousand times deeper.
I was only 6 and I didn't know how to float yet. I thought I would never learn how to float or swim because I can't even touch the floor. As I climbed into the water I stretched my feet out just to realize I couldn’t touch the surface
My dad wasn’t in the pool because he was buying ice blocks for me and my little brother, who didn’t want to swim. I let go of the edge of the pool but as soon as I lifted my hands up, the water dragged me into the middle of it like a giant whirlpool sucking me in. Slowly but surely, my head sunk into the depths of the endless deep.
As I was paddling my legs and arms for help, my dad swam rapidly towards me. But before he was there to save me, I was swimming! I couldn’t believe what had just happened because when you’re just a young person, the pool feels a thousand times deeper.
By Lance M
